Edited Treatment

TITLE: When is it all over?
GENRE: Film noire
LOG LINE: A suicidal man attempts to end it all one morning but it does not all work out as planned.
Driving along side the coast, trees whizzing by as the sunsets. An empty road, a car appears and stops in the frame on the side of the road. Moments pass, everything is still and silent. An emotionally bruised man grips the steering wheel with frustration adding to the subtle suspense of the scene. It’s so quiet one can’t almost hear his heart beat. A close up on his eyes shows us his vulnerability as a tear is shed and he wipes it off with his hand.
The audience still hasn’t seen his full face.
A shot from the back seat of the car captures his head and the sun setting. A slow pan to a picture on the dashboard of the character and his girlfriend, the picture ripped between each other’s face where his identity is revealed for the first time, “Tom and Kelly forever”. A sign of hopelessness fills his eyes. He starts to space out remembering short flashbacks of her smiling face and them two having fun together. A second tear find its way down his cheek.
He steps out of the car and looks out into the distance with a miserable look on his face. One thinks, “Is he going to kill himself?”
He goes into the trunk if his car where he finds a hose and a rag. He pauses for a second, rethinking his decisions. As a third tear falls to the ground, he stuffs the exhaust with the hose and the rag and puts the other end of the hose through a small opening in his window. Before starting his car, he attempts to write a suicide note but the only pen he has doesn’t work adding to his suicidal tendencies.
Takes a breath.
Silence
He starts the car. A few seconds later, it suddenly stops. Gas meter reads EMPTY.
The character walks down the street with a tank in his hand as the screen fades to black.