Log Line- A young man struggles to find the one person he is destined for.
A long hall way, in the distance you see a young man who seems to be rushing towards something. Close up of his hands reveals that he has a wallet in his hands. Then we see a girl in her car drive off as the guy is approaching the car. We then find out that the guy was trying to give back the girls wallet after she had dropped it.
As the guy is looking through the wallet he finds a photo of her and falls in love with the girl. After looking at the photo for a long time he decides to go and find out more about her so he looks into a yearbook.
A birds eye view shows him flipping through the yearbook frantically, after he finds her again he stares at her as if he was deeply in love with her, then the screen fades to black
We see the guy again at a cafe, medium shot shows that he is still holding on the picture of the girl. We hear the sound of the door chimes as a person walks into the cafe. We can only see her feet. The guy not paying attention to who walked in keeps on reading his paper.
Then he turns and catches a glimpse of her, a sudden rush of emotion goes through him and goes after her. She walks out of the cafe and he rushes after her. he then yells out her name. As she hears him she turns away and the screen fades to black.
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I like the plot of this story. It has features from Amelie which is a good thing. Try to think how the tension between them could build up more. For example, show how he likes her and wants to get her attention but she is too preoccupied.
ReplyDeleteits really good. but the dream scene is almost unecessary because it doesnt further the plot. or if you really want to have that in there, make it so that we think its real, but then he wakes up. don't show us that he falls asleep.
ReplyDeletei think this is a pretty good treatment. i think you need to get deeper into the story of the guy and the girl. also i think you shouild try to find another way of finding out whose phone it belongs to because a shot or a phone isn't all that interesting.
ReplyDeleteVery detailed, i like the importance of the dream to the story. It connects well to the idea of magical realism and making a dream world within real life.
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